Friday, September 10, 2010

Am I The Only One?

Who has trouble coming up with creative ways to describe ordinary actions? I find my characters do a lot of "looking" and "smiling" and "frowning", and when they're done boring themselves silly with that, they go "walking".

Anyone else struggle with this? I'm pretty proficient with dialogue. I can crank out some decent narrative, but when it comes to things like:

"Put the gun down!" Harry screamed, looking at Mike.

Mike smiled. "Nah. I think I'm gonna watch you die."

It just needs some oomph. Any suggestions on how to spruce up common actions?


  1. "Put the gun down!" Harry screamed, with his trembling eyes glaring at Mike :)

  2. oh wait...that was from me Cheryl


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